齐文玉：高考英语读后续写需要有颜值（续写高分技巧四）
你好我是齐文玉。20年专注于中高考英语教学。一个重视“授人以渔”，相信“真诚到永远”的英语老师。
我帮助很多学生在学业上有所成就。
每当看到他们最后以优异的成绩考上了自己理想的重点高中与名牌大学；
或者本来对自己缺乏或丧失了学习自信的学生通过我的指导掌握了学习方法，激发了学习英语的兴趣与动力、最终取得理想的成绩。
这正是我热爱教学动力的源泉。
那么如何让自己的英语成绩获得进步呢？
请关注我的有关高考英语读后续写高分技巧系列四，希望能给正在紧张准备高考的学生们以及其他年级的学生和朋友们一点启发和帮助。
一、有颜值的读后续写高分技巧之四
只有好的技巧，若是没有美好的环境来烘托，肯定还是远远不过的。
今天就抛砖引玉，看看如何使环境氛围变成“高颜值”。
1、阳光
The setting sun cast an orange glow over the mountains.
With the sunlight flooding/streaming into the room, she was bathed in the warmth.
Bathed in the golden sunlight, the lake was shining charmingly as the breeze gently left the ripples when it passed by.
2、酷热
A heat wave swept over the whole town so that everyone could feel his skin beginning to roast under the raging shine.The sun seemed to be trapped in the narrow streets, and even in the shadows the heat still lingered.
3、温暖
When the air hit the burning oven inside, a strong flow of warmth made its way towards my body.
It"s a warm spring morning with sunlight shining gently on the ground, like a mother lovingly strokes her baby.
二、句式也要有颜值
打磨句式,交替使用长短句
1、句式就是句子的结构方式,句式的丰富多样是体现考生语言能力的重要维度。
2、短句子适用于表述概念,陈述事实,增强叙述的力度,给人以精练强调之感。
3、长句子经常用于描写和解释一个完整的情况,给人以严谨深刻之感。
4、长短句的交替使用,不仅能丰富句式的表达方式,还能增加文章的节奏感,使文章流畅自然,活泼生动。
5、题目示例下面选取一篇读后续写的第一段作简要分析
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Kelly rushed down to the sidewalk but couldn"t reach her crying daughter. Then an idea struck her.She hurried upstairs and knocked on the door of the neighbor on the second floor, with Isabelle following closely behind. Hearing what had happened, the neighbor let them in and joined the rescue. From the window opened they were able to reach the crying girl. Then they carefully pulled her inside. Kelly held Anne in her arms tightly and examined if she was hurt. She was pretty shocked to find that Anne only had a bruise on her right arm.
文章主要讲述了 Kelly最近搬了新家,还没来得及给位于六楼的公寓窗户安装防护栏。两岁的女儿Anne坐在窗台上玩玩具,却不慎坠落。万幸的是,Anne落在了公寓楼入口处的雨篷上, Kelly非常害怕,急忙冲下楼去救她。续写部分以短句开篇,直接点明故事情节走向,干脆利落。中间用长句描写了Kely的做法和邻居的反应,其中,with复合结构、非谓语动词作状语、宾语从句等语法结构的使用丰富了句子内容,增加了文章的可读性。
三、上期读后续写练习 3范文与解析
1、文章大意
文章讲述了一个生活在大森林的三口之家的故事。在一个寒冷的冬天,热爱森林的孩子突然一病不起,生命垂危,他唯一的希望是父亲能捕一只鸟来和他玩。然而,这个季节里,鸟儿早已飞走,于是父母做了一只栩栩如生的木鸟,给孩子带来了希望。
2、写作指导
Paragraph1的开头是"父亲再次晚上去了儿子的房间",再结合文章最后一段的" Late on that night, lgor"s father went into his son"s room quietly and made the thread a little shorter”可知,父亲会做类似的事情以鼓励孩子站起来,故第一段续写内容可围绕父亲的做法以及第二天孩子的反应展开。
Paragraph2的开头是"几天后,gor的父亲在砍柴时听到房子里传来尖叫声"。根据文章内容可知,声音可能与Igor有关,再由文中描述可知, Igor状态在变好,应是高兴的声音,因此接下来可描述父亲跑到Igor房间看到的一幕。
3、名师点津
根据所给续写段落开头语提示和上文的铺垫,第一段并不难写,关键在于第二段的情节转折。第二段所给的提示语指向并不太明确,留给考生丰富的想象空间,但续写时切不可天马行空。写作时需辨别出文章的走向以及文章的情感基调,即故事在向积极正向的一面发展,所写内容也应传达积极乐观的思想。
4、参考范文
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Again, at night the father went into his son"s room. Seeing Igor was asleep, he put the bird a little higher and left. To his joy, Igor was able to stand on the bed and nearly touch the bird the second day. He wanted to make it go round in person. The woodcutter encouraged his son to go on trying, telling him it was not as high as he thought. However, Igor still wanted to know the name of the bird. The father said he was trying to figure out the kind of the bird.
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Several days later, Igor"s father was cutting wood when he heard a scream from the house. He ran quickly to his son"s bedroom. He couldn"t believe what he saw. lgor was jumping up and down excitedly on his bed. It was above his head that the bird was going round very fast He showed off his performance to his father."Please tell me,what"s its name?""It" s called the bird of surprise,"his father replied excitedly. And his mother, standing at the door, cried tears of joy to see her young son full of life once again.
四、读后续写写作训练 4
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文续写的词数应为150左右。
In 1963, at age 65, my grandfather, Erwin, decided to tackle a crazy project: He wanted to build a new house. Hewasn"t quite sure what to do with the old house. It seemed a waste to destroy it, but something had to give, since it sat where the new house would be. At last, he hired powerful vehicle to push the old house far out into forest.
After my grandfather passed away, I purchased a near farm. When we first moved in, we asked friends to a party. They took one look at the old house and all suggested pulling it down. I agreed. Days later, I was prepared to carry out the project. But I considered it sensible to check out the old house first, just in case something of value had been left behind.
My two young sons followed, and we walked through the tall grass in the field where the old house sat. Time hadcaused a lot of damage to it. The front porch(门廊） had collapsed, most of the windows were gone, and the siding was falling off. The kids were amazed that nine people once occupied the tiny structure, and that they did so without running water or electricity. We entered through an open window.
I felt as though I had discovered time capsule unexpectedly. Here lay various witnesses to my grandparents" lives.A broken chair, some old clothes, large bags used for grain, a cookstove and a cardboard box stuffed with canceled checks and greeting cards. But a pile of papers on the floor drew my eye. An envelope, yellowed with age, lay on top. A blue stamp on the envelope read " Passed by Naval Censor " . I knew it was from my father. He had served in the navy and written home wherever he could. My grandmother saved all of his letters. Father passed away due to a massive heart attack two years ago. The entire family was sad about his passing, none more than me. I"ve been missing him badly.
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How could I have missed this treasure?
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At the bottom, there were words in underlined print: " Can’t wait to be back home. "
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